What Happens When You Do Not Ask For Pemission to Your Mom
by Daniel Leon
I remember last year I wanted to go to Fito Paez concert, I like his music a lot and when I saw by TV that he would come to Peru, first thing I thought was “I have to go anyway”.
by Daniel Leon
I remember last year I wanted to go to Fito Paez concert, I like his music a lot and when I saw by TV that he would come to Peru, first thing I thought was “I have to go anyway”.
The concert was going to be at Monumental Stadium and it is far away from my home, also
the concert would start too late, so that’s why I didn’t tell
nothing to my mom.
Then, when the day of the concert came, my mon was not at
home, and she’d returned until night, without think twice I called my fríend
and told her that I would go. We were late, so we hurried up and took the first
bus we saw to go to the stadium, but when we were on Javier Prado avenue the
traffic was terrible, we re stuck on the traffic about forty minutes. It was
7:45p.m, and the concert started at 8, she told me so get a taxi, so that we
could arrive at time. Even though it was late I wanted to tried, so we got a
taxi from Javier Prado avenue to Ate, the taxi driver was driving fast but not
enough to arrive at 8.
Finally, we arrived at 8:25p.m and we couldn’t listen to 3
of our favorites songs, I was angry for that, but I tried to enjoy the concert.
Then, while I was going home back, I had many missed calls in my cellphone from
my mom, and when I was at home again, she yelled at me and punished me without
going out.
I thought I’d have a good day, but it turned out in one of
the worse.

Sorry for your bad day :P
ResponderEliminarWell, The composition is ok, but you have some mistakes in the first paragraph. :))
i think everything is correct but take a look the second line.
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