Daniel's Life
Well, my name is Daniel Leon Chicoma. I was born on June 15th 1993. I'm 20 years old. I live with my parents and my two siblings in Ventanilla-Callao. When I was a child I lived in Cercado de Lima then I moved and have been living in Ventanilla for 15 years.
About my childhood, I think I had a great childhood, I spent the time with my friends, we played a lot of games in my neighborhood like "Escondidas", "Mata gente", and those kinds of games that has been replaced for tablets and cellphones in this generation. I also used to ride skate when I was 12 years but I had an accident in my head, I crashed against a light post, since then I stopped riding my skate.
Well, about my life school, I studied all my life in the same school, Antonio Raymondi, where I met really good friends whom I still see. Then when I finished secondary, I started studying Computer Science at Idatur, and after that, I wanted to study English, I always liked it even when I was at school but at school I didn't pay it the enough attention, so I started studying at ICPNA, I've been studying there for more than two years.
Now I want to focus on learning English perfectly, so I am going to take the methodology course when I finish the advanced course next year.
About my goals, I have many goals in life that I want to achieve, but I would like to talk about only one, I’d like to work on a cruise ship (that's one of the reasons why i'm studying english), where I can make money and know all the world at the same time, and I’m conscientious that It is not going to be easy, but, I am also conscientious that if you want to get something in life you have to try very hard.

Your composition is ok, but you have some mistakes. For example, in the last paragraph you have to correct 'to work in a cruise ship', you have to use ON instead of IN.
ResponderEliminarHere's another mistake, When you say: "since then I stop riding my skate" You have to use the simple past.
ResponderEliminari think you have to correct the final part , but everything is ok except your life is boring!! just kidding xd
ResponderEliminarThanks for the advice :D
ResponderEliminarI'll try to correct them